Postby elementropy » Mon Apr 15, 2013 6:55 pm UTC
So here is the litany as I designed it:
The Litany of The Waits:
Leader: Later!
People: Bye!
Leader: Wanna swim?
People: Yeah!
Leader: Pffthh
People: *cough*
Leader: You ok?
People: Just got some in my mouth.
Leader: Any idea where the river is now?
People: Still pretty far out. It's actually retreated a little this week.
Leader: I don't understand what the sea is doing.
(All observe a meditative silence)
Leader: I don't think we can build it much taller than this.
People: It's been fun, though!
Leader: Pfffth Pthuh! Yuck.
People: I've had worse.
Leader: Guess one of us should climb down.
People: Yeah.
Leader: The sea is rising.
People: Yeah.
Leader: Sea level rises and falls, right? It's changed before.
People: Not this fast.
Leader: The river hasn't even reached the sea yet.
People: The river is small. The sea is big.
Leader: How big?
People: I don’t know.
(Several beats of silence are observed.)
Leader: Does it Rain on the Sea?
People: I don't know; if it does it seems like a waste.
Leader: It rains in the hills where the river comes from, right?
People: Sure.
And here would be the result if it were rearranged to be a reading of the dialogue as character roles, leader being Megan:
A Presentation of Dialogue:
People: Later!
Leader: Bye!
(Silence)
Leader:Wanna swim?
People: Yeah!
Leader: Pffthh *cough*
People: You ok?
Leader: Just got some in my mouth.
(Silence)
Leader: Any idea where the river is now?
People: Still pretty far out. It's actually retreated a little this week.
Leader: I don't understand what the sea is doing.
People: I don't think we can build it much taller than this. It's been fun, though!
(Silence)
People: Pfffth Pthuh! Yuck.I've had worse.
(Silence)
People: Guess one of us should climb down.
Leader:Yeah.
(Silence)
Leader: The sea is rising.
People: Yeah.
(Silence)
People: Sea level rises and falls, right? It's changed before.
Leader: Not this fast.
People: The river hasn't even reached the sea yet.
Leader: The river is small. The sea is big.
People: How big?
Leader: I don’t know.
(Silence)
Leader: Does it Rain on the Sea?
People: I don't know; if it does it seems like a waste.
(Silence)
People: It rains in the hills where the river comes from, right?
Leader: Sure.
I gotta say, I don't like it as much, either for logistics or flow.
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Last edited by
elementropy on Mon Apr 15, 2013 7:07 pm UTC, edited 2 times in total.
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